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An accepted challenge: Sick Day continued

I don’t(can’t) write fiction, but I love a challenge.

So when Denny from The Ceaseless Reader Writes challenged me to write a sequel to his flash fiction, I said ‘intriguing”. You can read the prequel over here. It’s called Sick Day.

Now, I am not as good of a writer as him, I definitely know way fewer words, and I have written fiction only once, failing miserably. But here goes my attempt at a flash fiction sequel. I had to admit, it was fun, maybe I will restart writing fiction!

Screen shot from the Denny’s original post. Please visit his website for the full post.

Sick Day continued

 

You’re safe in the tunnel. I tried to induce sobriety in my body.

Every inch of me was trembling with horror.

You’re dreaming.

I became muddled. Air failed to fill my lungs. Bright dots danced on the dusty windshield, and a sudden darkness swallowed everything.

I woke up, slowly opening my heavy eyelids. Realization struck my groggy mind and my eyes shot wide open. Phew, it was a dream, after all. I melted back into the sleepy daze.

I was slipping back into the bliss when everything began to quiver and quake. A roaring bang split my ears, I scoured for the source.

Stinging darts of panic stabbed my body. This wasn’t my room. This wasn’t even a room.

I was confined to six walls of metal bars. The elephantine arm was shaking the cage. Attached to it was a colossal man, gesturing towards a metal box in the corner.

I was no longer disengaged. Muscle memory wouldn’t help me now, my muscles had no memory of this.

Perturbed by adrenaline, I walked towards the metal box and entered the tunnel-shaped door.

There he was, my boss, knife in hand, gawking at me with wrathful eyes.

He charged at me.

UPDATE: For part 3 read Viola’s brilliant sequel.

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33 Comments

  1. Interesting. You should give writingFlash Fiction another shot.

    1. It was so much fun, I didn’t expect it to be so exciting.

  2. ” Not as good of a writer” ??? How can you say this? Your voice is different but it’s uniqueness is the beauty. Bravo & write on!

    1. haha Thank you Laura, you are so kind to me xxx

  3. That was great!!!! You and Denny really had me going!!!!! Loved it!!!!!!!! Don’t underestimate yourself! You have serious talent, girl!!!!! 🙂

    1. Thank you, thank you. I’m glad you found it riveting.

  4. Eeeek!!!!
    Brilliant!!!!
    What a fun idea, two people writing together ?

    1. Thank you for you sequel, I am loving this!

      1. Loved yours too ???

  5. […] Continue reading and see Em’s original post at Earthly Brain here. […]

  6. Wonderful Emma – you have kept the momentum flowing. So who is writing the third instalment???

    1. Viola Bleu already did, who’s next?

    2. I updated the post with the link to part 3!

  7. Oh, Em. This is FANTASTIC!!! You do yourself a disservice claiming you can’t write fiction. Not only does your sequel flow logically and seamlessly from my original, you picked up beautifully on my style with alliteration and long sentences. I love these phrases: “Bright dots danced on the dusty windshield, and a sudden darkness swallowed everything”; “Stinging darts of panic stabbed my body”; “I was slipping back to the bliss when everything began to quiver and quake. A roaring bang split my ears, I scoured for the source”! And “elephantine”, that very word occurred to me when I was thinking of the scale of the arm.

    You NAILED it! Thank you so much for accepting the challenge. My friend Viola Bleu has already posted a part 3, so check her blog out. And at least one other friend has agreed to post a sequel too, so keep checking back.

    You made my week!

    Love & hugs,

    Denny

    1. Thank you Denny, this means so much coming from you. You are a fantastic writer, at first I thought you might be an English Literature Professor!

      Thank you for this challenge, I have been shaking with energy all day. I am happy that this didn’t disappoint.

      <3

      P.S. loved part 3!

      1. I long entertained hopes of being a high school English teacher then changed my mind and wanted to be a college English professor. 2 years of grad school and 2 semesters as an adjunct English professor conspired with age and a desperate need to find more lucrative work, finally forcing me to get a different job entirely. But the urge to write won’t leave me alone. Thanks again, Em, you really rock!

        1. I understand, I have an MA in English Lit and I just couldn’t see myself teaching so now I work in communications and public relations!

  8. You are a very good writer. As is Denny. Keep going!

    1. Thank you xx That’s very motivating!

      1. Awesome. I’m sure others have told you the same, because it’s true.

  9. Wow! What a great collaboration!

    1. It was so much fun, thanks for reading our story x

      1. It’s my pleasure!

  10. This was brilliant! Read all 3 parts! Is there a 4th?

    1. So happy that you liked them. Not a 4th part yet, but check back for updates.

      1. I’ll keep a look out!

  11. […] friend Em at Earthly Brain posted the first sequel, which I’ve already reblogged, here.  Then, my friend Viola Bleu at Ideas Become Words posted her sequel.  It begins like […]

  12. […] her sequel, click here.  After you read Sophia’s story, if you’d like, you can read Em’s story followed by Viola […]

  13. […] Earthly BrainAn accepted challenge: Sick Day continued […]

  14. […] After writing a compelling short story on his blog (which you can read here), Denny’s readers voiced their desire for a sequel. Instead of writing the sequel himself, Denny challenged his readers to write their own sequels. Em from Earthly Brain was one of many who decided to give it go! (Read her sequel here) […]

  15. […] in March, my friend Denny challenged me to write a sequal to his flash fiction Sick Day. After that, more bloggers did the same and we had a ton of fun! So […]

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